Topic: It's a Funny Old World: O.O.C.
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I never get to reading it decently, although I followed bits and pieces of it. When I read it completely, I'll comment ![]()
At first glance it looks nice though.
I've read all of it, the humour is dry, just the way I like it. I like it a lot.
I just suck at writing reviews.:P
That's cool; a review is a review even if it is succinct. ![]()
It's pretty good, but it took me a while before i realized it was a girl ![]()
Good, that were bein' me intention. And swab the deck, me Jolly Roger ![]()
It is somethin' I'm tryin' t' carry through th' whole thin', a naturally occurrin' subtlety rather than intentionally tryin' t' hide details, a way o' keepin' everythin' thar but not in an "in yer face" kind o' way.., me Jolly Roger like that fact that certain plot arcs be in th' background (Hope I di'nae spoil anythin' by addin' that).
yarr tis a good plan, aye be wishin' i'd be doin' that more.
Pirate bump
YARRR
Sweet, I had forgotten about this.
Comments bitches
How am I fearing till now?
Cool, I like the way you're moving it, but the style I chose seems to have you vexed;)
You need to learn about these ,,,,, things.
>_The last time a camaar passed here. A friendly that is. Was some 200 years ago. Guess when construction of this station started.<
>_The last time a camaar passed here, a friendly that is, was some 200 years ago. Guess when construction of this station started.<
See?
and you're getting happy with the _ at the start of an entry. I used the _ to signify same day but different time, like hours apart, but it seems like you use them at the start of each line, implying a totally new entry every 30 seconds.
> _I put myself behind one of the docking lines and waited until it was my turn. And as it turns out I was in for another surprise.
_The last time a camaar passed here. A friendly that is. Was some 200 years ago. Guess when construction of this station started.
_ Yeah after that meaning they don't have anything that'll fit without harming the construction around the doors. Possibly destroying it.
_I know relavons have to take in every ship willing to dock in times of peace. It's the law.
_But still the guy in charge of this place had the nerve to question it. This is what he said, hold on I have it as a recording..
_"We on spacedock 32e23p also known as the Ventura regret to inform you that we are unable to take you in. Our docking mechanism doesn't allow for it. We hope you will comply by moving your ship back out, they might be able to help you planet side." <
> _I put myself behind one of the docking lines and waited until it was my turn. And as it turns out I was in for another surprise.
The last time a camaar passed here. A friendly that is. Was some 200 years ago. Guess when construction of this station started.
Yeah after that meaning they don't have anything that'll fit without harming the construction around the doors. Possibly destroying it.
_I know relavons have to take in every ship willing to dock in times of peace. It's the law. But still the guy in charge of this place had the nerve to question it. This is what he said, hold on I have it as a recording..
"We on spacedock 32e23p also known as the Ventura regret to inform you that we are unable to take you in. Our docking mechanism doesn't allow for it. We hope you will comply by moving your ship back out, they might be able to help you planet side." <
Other than that, no prob' bob.
Yeah, I was using it as pauzes between talking.
Which seems wrong ![]()
Actually, I think I indicated every log entry with _ while leaving the time between them ambiguous(I had to google the spelling)
another addition: I have the general plot lined up for the next 3-4 post which will be woven into what Fokker gave me. But I'm having difficulty trying to process this into the format.
This might be the hardest thing I've ever written.
It's working for me.
Wondering what the "errrand" is.
Don't we all
edit: I hate the fact that I can't spell for shit.
lol... "nothi/end"
The end bit is explained by how the recording device works.
edit: and why this is not explained in the story is also explained. Which will also not be mentioned.
Huh?
I'll send you a mail
Currently trying to flesh out the ship as much as needed.
This is taking a lot longer then I thought. Currently I can't think of a great system for levels(if there are any) and how the ship connects compartments. I have figured out how some of the systems work and how they actually kinda make sense in scifi.
holy shit a post!
EDIT: also I have 25 different version on how the ship looks and it's insides, I'm scrapping the idea.
lol... i had that problem, that's why i decided to stay vague in my descriptions...
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