Not bad at all, though I tend to be the tolerant type when it comes to reading short stories, so if you want the good stuff you'll have to be a little* patient

Keep writing, I'm interested to see where this goes.

*For a specific definition of 'little'.

Awesome... there is something about hitmen and assassins that bring out a feeling in me, perhaps a secret and unspoken knowing that we are not all that different, like when the Wolf and Hitman make eye-contact in Collateral?

My only complaint: Never put thoughts in speech marks as it can confuse people, for example, instead of [As I aimed the cold steel of the gun at his head I thought "Yes, I finally got you you bastard"]  Go for something like [Yes, I thought as I amied the cold steel of the gun at his head, I finally got you you bastard]

There are not many rules for writing, and If I remember correctly most of them are not rigid, but ths one rule is one of the few that all writers must obey... actually that is the only rule of writing I remember

yes, I'd prefer italics, however, I must work with what I have. I'm using Word and copying it in, so I might try it on the next section. That is, whenever my next hour lunch break is at work

saturday, fyi so sunday or monday, update