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I didn't like the direction i was taking the old story, so i decided to make a new one.

Hopefully you'll enjoy it.

The Prophet

Prologue

The blade in his right hand took a man

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Blood filled gore. What we can always expect from borg tongue. Although I did not like the referance towards Judas since their are many gospels that contradict the ones christian have.

Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...

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Dude, it's fiction. Live with it.

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Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...

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Chapter 1

The HMS Faith, flagship of the Holy Order of the Archangel, circled in orbit over Kalan Formosa, patiently waiting for its master

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Chapter 2

The HMS Faith sped through the solar system

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You killed all the muslims sad

Even if its a story I feel a little sadness.

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Good story! (nothing to do with your post, aro)

I think only the extremist muslims who refused to convert died, no?

Especially chapter 2 has a good atmosphere, making you feel you're there. Also the grim background feeling I like.

Chapter 1 was a bit clich

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I have tried writing something similar - about angels in space - but it came out 'cartoony'.   For example, I struggled with the whole idea of wings for a long time.  Why do your 'angels' have wings, borg?

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Chapter 3

He ran. His heart beat so hard in his chest he felt it was going to explode. His lungs sucked in the humid air, thick and slurry. His muscles ached with the sustained effort of the flight. He jumped over a fallen tree, nearly tripping as he landed.
Faster, damned, faster, he thought to himself as he pushed his body even harder. They

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my angels have wings because they use them as weapons. They sheat them in metal before a battle.
Also, yes, every muslim died. So did budhists. And possibly jehova's witnesses. That'll teach them for going around on sunday banging on people's doors at ungodly hours. ^^

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Chapter 4

It was the wind that first woke Thomas. It

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Is anyone reading this? If not, i can just as well stop writing.

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I'm reading it! I liked the part where you killed off all other religions!;)

PS: any prgress on that story where the Flemish Lion Chaplain gets send back in time? tongue

Je maintiendrai

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Chapter 5

Thomas slammed the scorched earth in fury and howled at the moon in pain. He

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Chapter 6

Serithnal walked proudly through the marbled corridors of the Order

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have you given up borg? its a great read!

Hsin Shee Lahn - Raif - Winton Rufer - Superman - Winterfell - Once - Raif Heart Kill - Ted Bundy - Valiant - Blackhail - antEhelp

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just been busy like hell.

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19 Reply by borg2 (edited by Gwynedd 24-Sep-2008 08:29:06)

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Chapter 7

Planet

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