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(Out of Story) - This is a story i've been writing for years. Hopefully i'll remember to post everyday, however my goal is to put up a chapter each and every day. Yes it reads a lot like a TV show in the states, but who cares, right? :-P please feel free to post commentary, and remember that this just gets worse as i get more drunk through the night. as in right now where i can hardly right this prologue. :-P

this first post will be kind of short as i need to go to sleep soon, and of course this is a retelling of an ongoing story ive written elsewhere, so i am literally rewriting it.

there is a map associated with this Part in the story. allow me to upload it to photobucket and it will be in my next post. smile

(begin Story)


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Map Image
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v620/

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I like the story, but the link isn't right, just sends me to photobucket's homepage every time tongue

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blah! FIXED!

its a global map. i have maps of the countries, but they'll be posted as the story carries on.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v620/yumchuunger/map.jpg

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more !!

Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...

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agreed... more!!!

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sorry guys! im working SO much. ill get to writing as we speak. smile thanks for letting me know someone reads this stuff. i appreciate it. smile

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8 Reply by [RPA] Dendai (edited by Dendai 02-Jun-2008 11:13:32)

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The Dragon Saga V

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now i have been debating entering this chapter for years now, so please please please, give me feedback, commentary, and reactions to the scenario here. one day i'm going to rewrite this whole story and try and sell it as a novel hopefully, and i need to know how the story is received.

Stay tuned for Chapter 3: Wreckage

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more please

aka the lemming of enigmatic encounters
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Seems I skipped the derailement scene a little, you might want to accentuate it. As for the rest yes it does read like some kind of script.

Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...

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12 Reply by [RPA] Dendai (edited by Dendai 03-Jun-2008 02:16:28)

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well the way it plays out in my head, its one of those minuscule scenes with major impact, however i think i want to rewrite it. i was just getting tired last night.

so i guess.... stay tuned for the UPDATED chapter 2! lol

P.S., thanks for the help Aro, i'm terrible with editing my own work. funny cause i was chief editor of my school's paper. :-P

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Reference (Religious; U

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14 Reply by [RPA] Arocalex (edited by [RPA] Arocalex 04-Jun-2008 18:57:58)

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The villagers numbered in the tens of thousands.

You might want to change that a little so it's not just a fact but a little diffrent in some way, I have some ideas for it but i'll let you figure it out tongue. And i'm missing suffering and heartache, you dont say what happened to the women when the men were made slaves. You might also want to describe these demigod a little better. Also keep in mind that while poeple are reading a book they dont want to go back and look how those guys looked like(I dont) so you need to repeat the piece several times differently. Or just describe the feeling they give so you remind the people how they look like.

For a biography there is a not a lot of emotions unless it isent and I didnt get it. :^p

And with chapter two you might add how crowded it was since I didnt get the impression there were other people there.

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15 Reply by [RPA] Dendai (edited by Dendai 05-Jun-2008 00:09:14)

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right on, you are right with chapter two. as i said, i wrote it real late.. that one im rewriting.

The second one is an excerpt from a holy book. it supposed to have the feeling of reading a Bible.

sorry if its confusing. :-P the headlines are actually more important than they seem. lol

i'm not sure when ill have time to rewrite, probably thursday after work before i go to my second job. smile

EDIT: I should say, it is to read more like a referance book or encyclopedia. :-P

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