Topic: Hoitash webcomic about ze trekkies
http://www.stwebcomic.host56.com/
I'll put this here so I can find it better and comment on the episodes better ![]()
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http://www.stwebcomic.host56.com/
I'll put this here so I can find it better and comment on the episodes better ![]()
Thanks. Now if only I could find a site that supports html posted comics.
you need previous and next and first and last buttons though
Since you've now robbed my thread of the only posts it was going to get, I may as well post my comments about your comic here.
A lot of grammatical errors considering there are only three comics up so far. If I could be bothered right now, I'd give you a full list. If you need someone to proofread it, just ask. I'd help you out with that, and I'm sure the others here might offer help too.
You keep reusing the same few screenshots. There's that one picture of Archer which you've used three times, and I'm reasonably sure every picture of Trip is used at least twice. It looks kind of sloppy, considering that you've got a whole series (how many seasons did Enterprise run for again?) to choose from, yet other comics in the style tend to achieve almost no repetition despite being based on films.
Another issue is with the comic storyline itself. You said yourself that Carl (in the role of Archer) will attempt to keep things canonical, and hilarity will ensue when he tries. However, we already know he succeeds, as otherwise you're not going to be able to show the results (no screenshots for scenes that didn't happen). Therefore it is natural to assume he is either the smartest or luckiest member of the group, as he is rarely going to fail. So far, his chracterisation doesn't seem to reflect either possibility well. Also, are they canonically called spacedocks? If so, seems odd for him to complain. If not, he would probably be complaining more. To say nothing of trying to derail the plot with his attempted seduction roll.
I'll omit my rant about the jokes in it so far (of which only one could be called remotely funny, and appears to be stolen from a much better worded joke in Darths and Droids), with the justification that this is literally the game being set up, so nothing has gone hilariously wrong yet.
I think that's all I've got to say for now.
I proofread the first and third, so the errors must be in the second, which I forgot to profread. I place the transcript in Word to spell and grammar check it.
I am aware of the screenshots. I have three epsiodes. I'll have more in several months when I can get another DVD. In the meantime I am working to expand the amount of screenshots, but with three epsiodes it a tough fight. But there is hope.
And yeah I stole that joke. It seemed to fit. Thanks for holding judgement, I'm new to this comedy strip thing.
The next chapter is posted per my Monday, Thursday, Saturday schedule.
And no screen shots for scenes that didn't happen? Oh ye of little faith.
My last post was a tad defensive. Sorry. But I am new at this.
there are deleted scenes ofc
Yup. A few screens are coming from them. What I really need is to get more full size-or at least larger-shots than just one character closeups, which I've used almost exclusively. But thanks to the magic of saving internet images, there's going to be stuff not even in the episodes.
Edit: I recieved this e-mail today:
Your account stwebcomic.host56.com has been checked and approved by the system administrator. Domain is now active.
We are sorry for inconveniences it may caused and thank you for patience.
It sounds like a pretty standard dee und dee game ![]()
Is that bad?
We'll see how you want to take things. Have you played a lot of d&d? And all the diffrent systems
Well the next episode is up. And to answer your question: no comment.
:d
Next episode is up and I do have html support, but I can't get the blasted thing to work. Any ideas?
Hit it with a wrench
"I'll elapse time so your actually there."
/me claws out eyes.
There's a method to the madness, trust me. Like why they didn't imediately end up at Kronos.
Seriously what was wrong with that? I'm all for constructive critcism but it has to, you know, make sense.
Well, the quoted line should have "you're", as in "you are". It has "your" as in "belonging to you".
Ah. Stupid Word checker. Grammar is not my strong suit. Blame the schools.
I blame your mother.
Well I was home schooled ![]()
In most cases, you have proper spelling but incorrect grammar. A spellchecker will not help with that. Then again, only weird people like me will actually be bothered by incorrect grammar. Unfortunately for you, almost everyone on this forum probably qualifies as being weird.
Well, I do my best. Speaking of which, the comics I'm writing are getting funnier, so please bear (bare?) with it. It'll be worth it, trust me.
I usually just look over them first glance. Only when rereading does it become bothersome.
Bear is an animal AFAIK
Well then there should be three ways to spell the word. Get rid of the confusion.
Bothersome? The grammar?
By the way, since I have acheived my goal of regular posts on Monday, Thursday, and Saturday, I will no longer post that I have placed the next chapter up. If it's one of those three days, it'll be up, unless something comes up, in which case I will tell you ![]()
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