Re: hmm some help
?? New thread for what just continue from chapter 3 but u find the best way to split the chapters. But hey it's just a suggestion take it only if you agree.
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Re: hmm some help
True, but new threads waste space particularly in roleplay where threads stick around for ages. So If u wish u could, with some "fancy" editing of your posts on the first page split up chapter 1 and 2 into 1.1, 1.2, 2.1, 2.2 without the need for a new thread. But again my suggestion is simply to continue as it is with chapter 3, it it about the same length, posted as two.
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Re: hmm some help
A plot twist 
, shiver me timbers
A love story
Battles
A kingdom o' auld
Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...
Re: hmm some help
Stealing from other forums holy necro batman:D Well welcome back now I gotta try and reread ur long story again.
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Re: hmm some help
like 23 A4 pages
Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...
Re: hmm some help
ahh lol
hold on i'll past the convo here
Not many people know this, but I own the first radio in Springfield. Not much on the air then, just Edison reciting the alphabet over and over. "A" he'd say; then "B." "C" would usually follow...
32 11-Nov-2008 22:28:27 (edited by [RPA] Arocalex 12-Nov-2008 12:24:49)
Re: hmm some help
(20:15) Arocalex Dri: hey
(20:16) Arocalex Dri: read all of it
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma: wicked what you think?
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma: could you understand ok, no offence btw
(20:16) Arocalex Dri: it has some flaws
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma: no
(20:16) Arocalex Dri: some expressions were unfamiliar
(20:16) mj.redding@hotma: faws
(20:16) Arocalex Dri: but i could understand them
(20:17) mj.redding@hotma: flaws
(20:17) mj.redding@hotma: how so?
(20:17) Arocalex Dri: hold on
(20:17) Arocalex Dri: you had some type errors
(20:17) Arocalex Dri: that i corrected
(20:17) mj.redding@hotma: oh lol
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma: dnt worry about them lol
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma: its first draft
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma: *
(20:18) Arocalex Dri: with its tendril like tentacle the vine close round the dark creature squeezing the corrupt soul until it was diminished into the realms of death
(20:18) Arocalex Dri: could you write that a bit longer
(20:18) Arocalex Dri: to really accentuate the killing
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma: yay
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma: my gf detered me from the ing a lil
(20:18) mj.redding@hotma: but i shall lots
(20:19) Arocalex Dri: the healing spell, tears dripping down his face he tried frantically to recall what he had done earlier that day,
(20:19) Arocalex Dri: that
(20:19) Arocalex Dri: the main char doesnt know that it was earyer in the day tho
(20:19) mj.redding@hotma: ?
(20:19) Arocalex Dri: he doesnt know how long he was passed out
(20:19) mj.redding@hotma: hmmm ill check that
(20:19) Arocalex Dri: you could argue that with the position of the sun
(20:19) mj.redding@hotma: thanks
(20:19) Arocalex Dri: but couldve been days
(20:20) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:20) mj.redding@hotma: nice
(20:20) Arocalex Dri:
Obeying Strandon slumped next to the tree no longer able to think clearly.
Slowly an image began to unfold in his mind , a scene of long ago.
(20:20) Arocalex Dri: how could strandon know that it was long ago
(20:20) Arocalex Dri: you could say he felt it
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma: hmmm valid point
(20:21) Arocalex Dri: but this seems wierd to me
(20:21) Arocalex Dri:
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma: though did i highlitght that bit?
(20:21) Arocalex Dri: nop
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma: hmm i shouldve
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma: my bad
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma: i know what you mean though
(20:21) mj.redding@hotma: yes
(20:21) Arocalex Dri: maybe some explaining as to how the surroundings were then
(20:22) Arocalex Dri: compared to now
(20:22) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:22) mj.redding@hotma: never thought of that
(20:22) mj.redding@hotma: excellent
(20:22) mj.redding@hotma:
(20:22) Arocalex Dri: and the part where the old man becomes micas
(20:22) Arocalex Dri: isent too wel done either
(20:23) Arocalex Dri: or it should be accentuated better
you have an emoticon as "killing" so it isent shown
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